Dear Ms Interviewer, I am very pleased to have received the offer of Financial Marketing Manager with Bank of the World and look forward to accepting it. I am convinced that my 10 years experience in this field will be a great asset for your organization. The terms of the offer are acceptable with a few minor modifications.
Base Salary of $60,000 per year. I have researched the industry norms for the position of Financial Marketing manager and believe a salary of $70,000 is more in-line with the vast experience and knowledge that I would bring to the job.
Benefits package.The benefit package offered by Bank of the World is very generous. I would only ask that the 6 month waiting period be waved.
Vacation. I understand that company policy only allows for 2 weeks vacation, despite industry experience. Would it be possible for me to take another week at my own expense?
The position of financial marketing manager is of great interest to me. I sincerely believe that it corresponds to my professional objectives and that my experience in product launches, I will be able to make a strong contribution to your organization. I welcome the opportunity to discuss these modification with you in the very near future.
Sincerely,
You may even want to set a range that is slightly higher than what you would like. That way you can negotiate downwards without having to compromise your salary goals. That said, do not ask for too much or you may find the offer off the table.